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War on Expert: Alice
War on Expert: Alice

Start of entry. M:47 State of war Authorisation A.D.M.I.N. Level 8 ( Purity censored)
Cleared for Observation.
Subject Authorised to proceed.
Subject Breach.
All Personnel files Deleted.
Program running….
Reloaded.
Subject Authorised to proceed. Identification High Lord Admin.

David wiped the blood off his combat boots. The destroyed remains of Diana and Blood Dancer littered the room. They were weak. The weak enemies of this one will die. David placed a bloody hand on the cell door and threw it open so hard, it tore itself off its hinges. The sound of clanking iron echoed down the hallway. David began to walk down the hall, every step echoed as his feet hit the ground. David adjusted his helmet and checked his weapon. Apart from the large bloodstain on the hilt, it was in perfect working order. As he reached the end of the hallway, David heard footsteps approaching the other side of the door. Closer and closer they came, until David felt the door begin to move. Quickly David threw the door open, knocking 2 guardsmen to the ground. David fired his pistol, the bullet passing through the chest of one guardsman. Before the other could regain his footing, David kicked him, that guard’s last view was David’s foot hovering above his head. Then down it came.

David continued deeper and deeper into the base, searching for Delta block, level four. He continued walking, all the while, his head filled with the screams of Alice as they took her away that night ten years ago. David stopped at a door to his left. The door read Delta level four. Lets hear it for incompetence of the royal guard. David gripped the handle and turned it. The creak of the opening door made David cringe. It was like nails down a blackboard. He help his pistol ready, and took his first steps inside.

The chamber inside was massive. Every single thing was either a path, a ladder or a machine. In the centre stood a large glass vat. Pipes and hoses connected and integrated with the huge structure. David followed one long gray hose back to its source. It was a large computer, and was displaying a graph that was written in a language that David had never seen. It looked like Chinese mixed up with Korean and Spanish. David couldn’t make head or tail of it. Wait a sec, if this is monitoring something in there…SHIT! David sprinted over to the vat. A limp body was suspended in the colourless gel, a air mask attached to its face. David knocked on the glass. The things eyes flew open. It began to swim over to the edge of its prison. David’s eye went wide in shock. There, suspending in gel, was Alice. David fought back tears of relief as he stared at her. Her green eyes staring back at his dark eyes There only two feet away was his love, his one love he swore to protect. He had failed once. He would not again.

” So you have finally found her David”, a voice mockingly said.

David turned around, expecting to find one of the High commissars but only found……

SS. Standing At the entrance wearing a dark suit and a scabbard at his belt.

” Wait,wait wait wait wait. Are you serious? They sent you SS”?

” Yup ” replied SS drawing a bolt pistol and his sword. ” Now I’m gonna do to you what I did to that werid Chucky doll”.

” What the hell is a chucky doll”? David asked.

” I don’t have a clue, but whatever. I will still kick your ass you little insec-”

BLAM,BLAM,BLAM!!

” Yeah yeah, shut up all ready” as David’s bullets blew SS’s sword, bolt pistol out of his hands and a large hole in his chest.

” God that was depressing. Why do do people always interrupt at the most annoying times. People these days.”, David sighed. David turned around and smashed his pistol but into the glass. It cracked, and David watched the crack travel to the top of the vat. Then a waterfall of gel broke through and drained itself all over the floor. David stood to the side as gel quickly covered the floor before being drawn away from the vat by small drains in the ground. Alice touched the floor as the gel drained away. David ran to catch her as she fell to her knees.

“David”, she said weakly. ” You came “.

” I would leave you for the world Alice. Let get the hell outta here”.

David carried Alice back to the ground floor. He found a service shuttle, and programmed it to take them to the airstrip. He put Alice down beside him and took a look at her. Her body had not changed, yet there was something different about her eyes. The iris’ looked… ragged. David decided to wait for a better time to look into it. As the shuttle began to slow down, David reloaded his pistol and gave Alice his vest. His eyes scanned ahead, looking for points of ambush. Weird, nobody is guarding the aircraft. Something is up here. The shuttle slowed to a halt and David spotted just what he wanted, a Lightning Vertical takeoff and landing aircraft. David picked Alice up, and ran for it. He opened the cockpit, gently placed Alice into the co pilots seat, then jumped into the pilot’s seat and fired up the engines. Soon David was cruising at 5,000 feet and traveling at mach 2.2

I have to leave Alice somewhere safe. I know just the person. Hope Alice doesn’t mind France.

David engaged the afterburners and Alice and him sped into the horizon.

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34 Comments
  • David
    September 17, 2009
    #1

    Yes Alright! 1st one here. Wicked

  • Pondering Fool
    September 17, 2009
    #2

    Mmhh interesting. Though it is a tad sad that SS was wiped out so fast. Reminds me of Indiana Jones and the Raider of the Lost Ark. The part where Indiana just shoots the arab sword master. Otherwise, great job David

    - pondering fool

  • Sapper007
    September 17, 2009
    #3

    @Pondering fool,
    yeah I was hoping for some true carnage from that battle… sadly t’was not to be so…

  • Space marine
    September 17, 2009
    #4

    “yeah I was hoping for some true carnage from that battle… sadly t’was not to be so…”

    I guess it turned out like this.
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BLQjntCXz3Q

  • Sapper007
    September 17, 2009
    #5

    @SM awesome… yeah kinda…

  • chewie6000
    September 17, 2009
    #6

    SS is down hotshot is down Diana is down, Blood Dancer is down, is it just going to end with you and this Alice person lefT? That would be an awkward end.

  • Sapper007
    September 17, 2009
    #7

    @chewie, they would have to repopulate the world ya know…

  • megafire
    September 17, 2009
    #8

    Interesting David, I can see your writing has improved over writing these chapters, which is awesome.

    Great job.

  • ss
    September 17, 2009
    #9

    i was hoping id unrealistically cut the bullets in half lol i dnt mind dieing as long as im not the only 1 2 go that fast great story, but i have 2 question
    if its this easy why did your charector take a ten year break? just wondering
    and also in the last story how did you get out of your restaints?

  • ss
    September 17, 2009
    #10

    dont mean to nitpic just wondering

  • sangheli
    September 17, 2009
    #11

    ” I would leave you for the world Alice.” hahahahahahahahahahahahhahahah!!!! typo

  • David
    September 18, 2009
    #12

    @ Sangheli

    I would leave you for the world Alice.”

    Aw shit. Damn typos. Spell check dont check that. DAMMIT

  • AlphaCommando
    September 18, 2009
    #13

    I detect Mary Sue(ing), buts lets see how this turns out before I pass total judgment.

    However the part with SS was…hilariously anti-climatic.

  • David
    September 18, 2009
    #14

    Uh oh. MUST NOT MARY SUE! NOOOOOO

  • chewie6000
    September 18, 2009
    #15

    @sapper, well seeing as I’m not dead I could be of great help.Hello Megan.:P

  • Sapper007
    September 18, 2009
    #16

    Dibs on MF Chewie… you. me. spoons and cheese. fight to the death…

  • ss
    September 18, 2009
    #17

    a mary sue charector is 1 who has no chalenges

  • Diana
    September 18, 2009
    #18

    @David

    You shouldn’t have disappointed ss…..

  • The Pondering Fool
    September 18, 2009
    #19

    @Sapper007
    “Dibs on MF Chewie… you. me. spoons and cheese. fight to the death”

    I get dibs on commercial rights….imagine all the money I will get from this…mwuhahahah, who says capitalism doesn’t work in the UK? Time to get rich!

    - pondering fool

  • Hitman H94
    September 19, 2009
    #20

    Dibs on……Oh F**k cant think of anything right now
    oh wait her body she is my slave

  • ss
    September 19, 2009
    #21

    @diana
    thanks…i think

  • David
    September 20, 2009
    #22

    @ hitman

    Say what?

  • Baron Somebody
    September 21, 2009
    #23

    @David

    I’m putting you in Baron Reloaded and you are getting a nice big ass whooping Baron Somebody style lol

  • Sapper007
    September 21, 2009
    #24

    If you all need bit of help with the writing i can help,

  • David
    September 22, 2009
    #25

    I’m putting you in Baron Reloaded and you are getting a nice big ass whooping Baron Somebody style lol

    Awww man. The ladies like my ass the way it is thanks brother. LOL

  • Baron Somebody
    September 22, 2009
    #26

    Well I mean you killed of Diana and SS like it was nothing…that isn’t cool…

  • Pondering Fool
    September 22, 2009
    #27

    @David

    Not criticizing at all (I do enjoy your story). But I have a simple question. When well we see the war against Expert happen openly? Seems right now, more about David rescuing Alice than a war against……(well, you know who). Not saying at all, I do not like your story, just wondering…..

    - the pondering fool

  • Diana
    September 22, 2009
    #28

    “Well I mean you killed of Diana and SS like it was nothing…that isn’t cool…”

    I concur with Baron…

  • David
    September 23, 2009
    #29

    @ pondering fool

    Don’t worry buddy, Big war is on the way

    @Diana

    Right. My ass is gonna be SOOOO sore. Aw man.

  • Pondering Fool
    September 23, 2009
    #30

    @ pondering fool
    “Don’t worry buddy, Big war is on the way”

    You have made s lightly deranged, verging on psychotic, madman’s day. Thank-you mate.

    - the pondering fool

  • Baron Somebody
    September 23, 2009
    #31

    Man if this were me in David’s place I would have just said “Fuck it already Alice can save herself” LOL

  • Diana
    September 24, 2009
    #32

    “Right. My ass is gonna be SOOOO sore. Aw man.”

    David, don’t base the story too personally….Sometimes you need to be subjective rather than objective.

    @Baron

    Hey, care to start “disturbance” here?

  • atlantis
    February 15, 2010
    #33

    Does Expert’s side have more men or more fire power and I still can’t see it as an open war like those in vietnam or in the middle ages. Plus It would be sorta cool if Admin was playing both sides and he emerges the victory only to be torn down by expert or david

  • Anonymous
    February 15, 2010
    #34

    Hey is this story continung?
    Toss me in there, It’d be fun….

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