Ping of Death – Part 1

Ping of Death

General White Stared at the hordes of green text constantly filling the main screen. A hush came over the meeting room when he cleared his throat. “Gentlemen.” He said turning. His military cut brown hair shined brightly in the dim lighting. “We have been fighting a war. A war that has raged on for decades. A war against a rogue organization that has dreamed of the destruction of the American way since they were born.” He paused and adjusted his glasses. “We have taken every path, hatched every scheme, taken every risk to end this war, and now gentlemen, we have our solution. A light behind him flickered on to reveal a metal figure. “CB-Delta. Our final solution against Anarchist United. Designed with the latest technologies, and structured to take on an army, he will rip the enemy apart from top to bottom. Class five assassin training already programmed in, he is the perfect soldier. The whole room was amazed by CB-Delta and all eyes were on him.

All eyes except those of Matthew Harrison. Sneaking off to the back room he clicked a button on his watch and a hologram sprung to life. A sinister silhouette of blue stared at him. It was the leader of Anarchist United. “Is everything in order Agent Harrison?” It said in a warped evil voice. “I trust you are succeeding.”

“No sir.” Matthew replied looking around nervously. “Every bug I tried implanting into the system, was terminated immediately. There’s no-”

“What about using MH.”

“Sir you said-”

“And this is an emergency. If we are to have things run as planned, we must break the security grid within the hour.”

Matthew sat in silence. Then unable to say any thing else, submitted. “Yes sir.” The Blue figure disappeared as his watch gave a small beep. Matthew slowly inched his way to a control terminal. He stuck his hand into his pocket and pulled out a small chip.

“With AU out of the way,” Droned White, “We can focus on-” The room went dark. “What happened!” White said, voice almost breaking.

“Sir, the defense grid is hacked! A rogue entity made it into the system.”

White was astonished. How could this happen? The security system has never been broken. “What in the name of…” The room was suddenly full of green light. not from the power return, but from the main screen. A green pixilated skull filled the screen.

“Sir surviving scanners received info. Mass Havoc Virus. It seems to have the ability to over-ping servers till they shut down. Then scan them in their unconscious state. We’ve been trying to quarantine it but it seem to just be eating the signals!”

White broke into a sweat. “Do everything within your power to get rid of this thing!” Then all hell broke loose. computers sparked and died. Alarms went on and off uncontrolled. All the door locked. None of this mattered to White. He was staring in horror as the list of accessed files scrolled across the main screen. This virus was now penetrating the organizations top secret files. Any machine, program or database was now accessible and under the control of an AU Virus. White’s heart stopped at the words CB-Delta.

Now It’s your turn Factpile! By commenting, you get a say in what happens next. Yup! You get to control the storyline!
As long as you fallow the rules you can request anything!!!

Rules:
I wont kill off a character without him already being in danger.
No sex. Sorry.
Don’t tell someone their idea is stupid please.
Thanks.

Other than that you’re good. Please add your ideas and become apart of this story. Can’t wait to hear your ideas! :D

Samuel Black

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26 Comments on "Ping of Death – Part 1"

  1. Space marine August 28, 2009 at 7:59 am -      #1

    Samuel?! Are there two admins!? Paul? ZOMG! Or are you someone we dont know yet.

  2. Matapiojo August 28, 2009 at 8:48 am -      #2

    Quite interesting, though I have no idea how to contribute at that particular point.

  3. Samuel Black August 28, 2009 at 8:56 am -      #3

    Hi. I’m Samuel. You were right when you said you don’t know me. I’m not an authoritative figure. I just submitted this.

  4. Matapiojo August 28, 2009 at 9:04 am -      #4

    Regardless, you are the first to establish an interactive story within the articles section rather than the more commonly seen rant or review (not that those are not good, just more common).

    That’s pretty boss in my book, so keep it up.

  5. Expert August 28, 2009 at 9:30 am -      #5

    I thought this was really good. I enjoyed it. I will wait to see what others say before I give you feedback on what direction to take the storyline.

    Keep up the good work!

    Winner: Everyone

  6. Blood Dancer August 28, 2009 at 12:08 pm -      #6

    That’s pretty good. i’d like to see what happens next.

    Keep it up.

  7. megafire August 28, 2009 at 12:20 pm -      #7

    Hold on a second.

    It crashed every system, yet the main screen stayed on?

    How does that work?

    Sorry, just nitpicking.

    Pretty damn good otherwise.

  8. ss August 28, 2009 at 1:06 pm -      #8

    wait does that mean all life supporting systems are down too? if so everyones in danger
    well, it seems noone want to be the first so i will be:
    mathew escapes, and gos to meet his superiors, unfortunately, he is now a loose end, and must be terminanted
    well im not saying he is killed, thats up to you but surviving can make him a clear protagonist

  9. Blood Dancer August 28, 2009 at 1:28 pm -      #9

    i like the scenario ss proposed. and i agree that if he survives he becomes the main character

  10. ss August 28, 2009 at 2:32 pm -      #10

    thank you for the support blood dancer

  11. Prime Chaos August 28, 2009 at 5:25 pm -      #11

    First i have a question. Is this in a Factpile universe?

  12. Samuel Black August 28, 2009 at 8:21 pm -      #12

    Ok,

    @megafire
    It’s a backup system, made so if the system fails they will still have SOME power. However MH is disrupting it enough where they can’t get back on. He has a bragging personality. (yes a personality) and is kind of showing off.

    @Blood Dancer
    You can help decide what happens next. Also the main character was gonna wind up being the virus. But that might change. I just figured he could have more potential.

    @Prime Chaos
    This is based off of the real world set in the near future.

    @Matapiojo
    Thanks.

    @everyone
    Thanks for commenting so far. If I don’t “@” you, comment again. I don’t mind repetitive posts if you need my attention. Also if this story works out well, and gets far enough along, I will eventually have an OC contest. I already have a few lined up, and would love to have more, but please wait for the contest to email me. Thanks.

    BTW if any1 needs help with knowing how to post ideas. Here’s some examples.

    1. “The virus should be destroyed and everything should be happy.”
    2. “Mass Havoc should control CB-Delta to where he self destructs and everyone dies.” (I used these examples hoping no one would want them, and feel I took their idea.)

    Thanks for commenting and keep it up. You can submit more than 1 idea. Get your friends to fight for your ideas!!! Just no spamming please. (equivalent to flooding the enrichment center with a deadly neurotoxin)

  13. Dracosphinx August 28, 2009 at 8:57 pm -      #13

    Imp? saying everyone wins? wow. That is a first. Damn… I don’t believe he meant it!

  14. Samuel Black August 28, 2009 at 9:38 pm -      #14

    Just saying before the fighting starts, there are at least four articles where the Expert vs David war are issuing. Another rule I should add now is no laming, flaming, or anything of the form. If this is to much to ask, you have one of two options, sue me, or write an article about how terrible I am. Just please. I promise, if that was what this story was about, I would be the first to do so. Thanks.

  15. ss August 28, 2009 at 10:36 pm -      #15

    lookslike im the only one who put down an idea thus far

  16. Samuel Black August 29, 2009 at 12:43 am -      #16

    @ss

    Thanks for posting an idea. I cannot however just go on yours. If you are the only 1 to post, Then You might as well just help me write the rest. But this is a public story, so it’s not gonna continue if I don’t get any other post with ideas. Try to encourage others to post their ideas or for yours.

    @Expert

    Thank for the complement. Your popular in your own way, mind helping with publicity? Of course this is on the front page… Hard to get better than that…

    @ everyone
    I can’t do this without y’all. (yes, I’m Texan) This is an interactive story.

  17. ss August 29, 2009 at 12:07 pm -      #17

    @ samual black
    im sorry if it came out like that thats not how i meant it, i was trying to get others to see that and post ideas

  18. PaPPa JUDAS August 29, 2009 at 6:14 pm -      #18

    How about a tron or reboot like scenario inside the computers charicters fighting the virus in virtual reality

  19. Samuel Black August 29, 2009 at 7:05 pm -      #19

    @ss
    oh, your fine. That’s not how I meant it either. I was also hoping people would see that and post something.

  20. ss August 29, 2009 at 7:40 pm -      #20

    @Samuel Black
    haha same idea, same mistake, well looks like they worked tho, PaPPa JUDAS put 1 down, hopefully more

  21. hitman8 August 30, 2009 at 7:03 pm -      #21

    goku rips through the space time continume and comes into this universe and blows up the entire planet but saves the main characters for them to only have their heads explode in space and then he shats down their necks……man im bored today.

  22. PaPPa JUDAS August 30, 2009 at 7:20 pm -      #22

    Ok how about a multi layer battle with the Virus the previous option of a battle within cyberspace coupled with a battle against the Virus within the real world as it would controll CB-Delta (Kinda reminds me of the mangler movies) as well still fighting the opposing forces Anarchists United.

  23. Samuel Black August 30, 2009 at 8:02 pm -      #23

    Hey, everybody. There seems to be very few post, and it doesn’t seem like there are gonna be much more. Don’t worry. I’m not gonna quit yet. Maybe it just needs to run a while. I’m going to go ahead and start writing the next part. I’m gonna use all non DBZ suggestions. This includes Matthew escaping, and the battles against MH virus, virtual and not. Just saying now, the part with matthew will come in later, so don’t worry too much boat it now.

    @every1 who didn’t put out thier ideas, and wanted to.
    I hope you put some down for this next part.

    @evry1 who did
    Thanks.

    I prolly wont have one of these comments in every part. I’ve commented too much here. I think I’ve written more in the comment part than in the story itself. Keep an eye out for part 2.

  24. David August 31, 2009 at 1:05 am -      #24

    Hey Man. Its a really good read. Keep it up

  25. David August 31, 2009 at 6:07 am -      #25

    White’s heart stopped at the words CB-Delta.

    CB Delta

    511th tank Battalion. Formed for Anti Xeno tactics. Currently the most advanced tanks in the world. Cermite titainic armour and Duel 150mm Charged railguns capable of hitting targets intercontinentaly. Also sport Nuclear Drive engines ( still into prototypes)

    Or

    Heavy weapon satteliettes with Next gen Magnetic Ions cannon. Made to destroy countries and any Unidentified life forms that come in range of Mars

  26. Envoy September 3, 2009 at 6:09 pm -      #26

    After reading PaPPa JUDAS ‘ it reminded me of Digimon season 3 with the D-reaper in both worlds destroying every thing maybe, after taking out the United Anarchists their leader gets assimilated into the virus and the virus calls itself like “The spirit of anarchy” or something. It arives in the real world and turns others into “anarchy cyborgs” like terminators then ALL humans unite Against the Cyborgs and anarchy.

    I might just put this on part 2 so you can see it.

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