War on Expert – Part 2

War on Expert - Part 2

Start of entry. M:42 State of war Authorisation A.D.M.I.N. Level 4 ( Clearance High 933367 )
Cleared for Observation
Subject Authorised to proceed.

Blood Dancer coughs, blood lining his lips. Pain spasms through his body. His wounds break and open, pouring more of his crimson life onto the dusty floor.
He slowly moves his uninjured right hand to his sidearm holster. With some effort, he lifts his hand and hands the scratched, grey pistol to Diana.
She looks at him, her eyes trying to find the reason why he had given it to her.

“Do you know the story behind that gun Dee”? he asks before coughing again.

” I have heard some rumours of that weapon from some guys in Beta Group”.

“Such as”?

“That pistol, they say its so heavy, only Superman could lift it”.

“That pistol has protected me, now it must protect you. Like superman”. Blood Dancer weakly says before spiting out
a glob of blood.

Diana holds the pistol and looks down at it. The once polished nickel plating is now scarred with scratches and has begun to blister at the muzzle. She flicks the toggle and drops the magazine. 15 rounds are staggered on top of each other. Each bullet missing its tip.

” Why are these bullets missing their tips”? Diana asks

“That’s for your target to find out”

“Gnat are we there yet”?

“About another 300 meters Sergeant”, Space Marine replies, checking his GPS.
“There they are, Second floor from the top. Oh and scans show that there is no power to the tower.”

“You gotta be kidding me. I hate taking this thing up stairs”, David says pointing at his rifle.

“Use your pistol dumbass”, Space marine sighs.

The two soldiers quickly enter the tower. They begin to climb their way up, always alert for Expert’s minions who could be waiting in ambush. Slowly and steadily the two of them climb until they reach the GPS’s marker. David pulls his Colt 1911 out of its holster, switches the safety off and grips the door handle. It turns and he swings the door open.
An explosion and David is thrown to the floor.

Diana didn’t even know she pulled the trigger. She had heard noises coming from the stairway. She took position behind a shelf and waited. The door had swung open and someone was about to enter. She spun from the shelf and fired Blood Dancer’s pistol at that someone. When she saw Space Marine’s head behind that thing she shot, she realised she had made a fatal mistake…..

To be continued…

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51 Comments on "War on Expert – Part 2"

  1. Pondering Fool August 27, 2009 at 1:41 pm -      #1

    NOO!!! Diana took down one of her own! What has this world gone to! Heroes dying (or seeming to die) in their youth…..not right……

    - pondering fool

  2. Expert August 27, 2009 at 1:49 pm -      #2

    ah its to be expected when challenging me. It will probably end with a complete slaughter of all who even attempt to fight me.

  3. ss August 27, 2009 at 1:57 pm -      #3

    much shorter, but i liked the fact that you are thinking outside the norm, the good guys do get hurt and die, as they would in real life, good job and keep it up, looking forward to seeing what other charectors come in

  4. Blood Dancer August 27, 2009 at 2:25 pm -      #4

    I agree with ss. it’s pretty good and easy to read. and i’m also curious about new characters.

  5. Megaraptor18 August 27, 2009 at 2:28 pm -      #5

    I am loving this story keep up the good work

  6. Envoy August 27, 2009 at 2:42 pm -      #6

    NOOO!!! Space Marine dont die T-T, give it to me straight doc is he gonna make? *sobs*

  7. megafire August 27, 2009 at 2:49 pm -      #7

    Space Marine didn’t get shot; David did.

    Awesome read there.

  8. Expert August 27, 2009 at 4:09 pm -      #8

    War on Expert – Part 3

    I launch the nukes. kill everyone.

    I live happily ever after. The end.

  9. megafire August 27, 2009 at 4:25 pm -      #9

    What deluded fool would give you access to nukes?

  10. Matapiojo August 27, 2009 at 4:51 pm -      #10

    “I launch the nukes. kill everyone.

    I live happily ever after. The end.”

    I think we will be more than safe. Knowing you and your supreme intellect, the nukes would probably fly off aimlessly into the vast vacuum we call space…

  11. Cpt Olimar August 27, 2009 at 5:01 pm -      #11

    “I think we will be more than safe. Knowing you and your supreme intellect, the nukes would probably fly off aimlessly into the vast vacuum we call space…”

    Or even more likely, he accidentally sets them off and kills himself, in his stronghold, thus eliminating him and his army of “noobs”

  12. Asger August 27, 2009 at 5:11 pm -      #12

    I think he’d just forget to open the silo doors,thus destroying detroying his ‘fortress of doom’ in a massive explosion while the 1812 overture plays in the background.

  13. Rise Up August 27, 2009 at 5:36 pm -      #13

    I join Expert. If it’s even possible lol. =)

  14. swifterdeath August 27, 2009 at 5:57 pm -      #14

    “I join Expert. If it’s even possible lol. =)”

    HERETIC!!!!! PURGE THE NON-BELIEVER!

  15. Space marine August 27, 2009 at 6:01 pm -      #15

    “ah its to be expected when challenging me. It will probably end with a complete slaughter of all who even attempt to fight me.”

    You’re not Diana….

  16. Space marine August 27, 2009 at 6:10 pm -      #16

    Oh and another very good written article. I approve.

  17. Mr. Gray August 27, 2009 at 6:12 pm -      #17

    wow david’s got a great imagination, hope this ends with expert in a teabag fest

  18. David August 27, 2009 at 7:05 pm -      #18

    @ Rise up.

    Thats not a bad idea. I needed someone who is gonna be experts bitch.

  19. Marche August 27, 2009 at 7:45 pm -      #19

    How about pokezilla?
    The lovable troll,or maybe hotshot.

  20. The One Sin August 27, 2009 at 7:49 pm -      #20

    “How about pokezilla?
    The lovable troll,or maybe hotshot.”

    Rob’s semi-intelligent thug body guards. Tough to beat head on but oh so easily outsmarted.

  21. Black Hand August 27, 2009 at 7:50 pm -      #21

    I nominate Didact and Frieza for that role.

  22. Cpt Olimar August 27, 2009 at 8:28 pm -      #22

    Hey, in all seriousness I think hotshot has improved quite a bit since his earlier posts. He even admitted that Halo would lose to Star Wars… that is unless it was his younger brother typing… which would mean he hasn’t changed at all :(

  23. ss August 27, 2009 at 8:39 pm -      #23

    @ david
    will it be revealled why they are after diana

  24. Pondering Fool August 27, 2009 at 9:39 pm -      #24

    I would just like to be the random civilian that is video-taping this awesome story the entire time……would be risky, but somebody must do it for later generations….

    - pondering fool

  25. PaPPa JUDAS August 27, 2009 at 11:16 pm -      #25

    Wow what the hell happened since the last time I was on here?

    And try capture the enemy alive bring him to my torture shack MY BLADES ARE LONGING TO TASTE FLESH

  26. AlphaCommando August 27, 2009 at 11:46 pm -      #26

    It needed more “Man draped in ammo belts with an M60 running down a broken street with a stupid look on his face.”

    Otherwise, the tension just got cranked up to 11, because as we all know a good war novel is made more tense with unintentional friendly fire or a possible not so friendly fragging.

    But seriously its very good, you’ve sparked our collective interests (I hope) lets see if you can keep it.

  27. Megaraptor18 August 28, 2009 at 12:22 am -      #27

    I wonder who would David pick to be Expert’s henchmen

  28. Expert August 28, 2009 at 12:49 am -      #28

    Your all my sheep so it doesn’t matter.

  29. David August 28, 2009 at 1:13 am -      #29

    It needed more “Man draped in ammo belts with an M60 running down a broken street with a stupid look on his face.”

    Hey. Admin put that one up not me. It sorta suits the whole war thing.
    Thanks Admin

  30. AlphaCommando August 28, 2009 at 1:16 am -      #30

    I know, I was making a horrible visual pun or some kind of comedic device…I think.

  31. Space marine August 28, 2009 at 3:00 am -      #31

    Im not his sheep. Silly Rob.

  32. CJ4short August 28, 2009 at 4:33 am -      #32

    Wh does Diana not answer these? Lol.

  33. Asger August 28, 2009 at 4:48 am -      #33

    I imagine this story ending in an epic fist-fight between David and Expert on top of Metal Gear ROB (Yes,his ego led to him naming a Metal Gear after himself) with David as the victor.

  34. Blood Dancer August 28, 2009 at 12:02 pm -      #34

    “Hey, Is Blood KIA here?”

    you mean me. i’m flattered. just came back from a soccer match with my friends. sadly, scored an own goal.

  35. hotshot August 28, 2009 at 6:41 pm -      #35

    “Hey, in all seriousness I think hotshot has improved quite a bit since his earlier posts. He even admitted that Halo would lose to Star Wars… that is unless it was his younger brother typing… which would mean he hasn’t changed at all ”

    No,i didn’t.

  36. Cpt Olimar August 28, 2009 at 6:50 pm -      #36

    “No,i didn’t.”
    I stand corrected.

  37. ss August 28, 2009 at 6:56 pm -      #37

    i hope 3 is out soon

  38. ss August 29, 2009 at 12:25 am -      #38

    @ pondering fool
    thats sound more like a war reporter

  39. Blood Dancer August 29, 2009 at 1:12 pm -      #39

    part 3, waiting for it…

  40. blackwing August 29, 2009 at 2:07 pm -      #40

    didn’t rob die in part 1? anyway this is great please write more soon. part 3 cant wait for it :)

  41. Pondering Fool August 29, 2009 at 4:17 pm -      #41

    @ss

    Yes, that is what I was thinking about! Thanks mate. I would like to be the random war reporter that everyone tries to kill, but somehow survives…..until he steps on a land mine in the finale.

    - pondering fool

  42. ss August 29, 2009 at 7:44 pm -      #42

    @pondering fool
    and every one swears to avenge haha just kidding david this is your story, have fun, only if you like his idea

  43. David August 29, 2009 at 9:11 pm -      #43

    Part 3 should be out in a few hours. Should get peoples minds thinking about stuff to do with people’s pasts.

  44. Dracosphinx August 29, 2009 at 11:12 pm -      #44

    HA! SM gets killed off *peter griffin laugh*

  45. sangheli August 30, 2009 at 12:19 am -      #45

    one word…..OWNED

  46. Space marine August 30, 2009 at 12:26 am -      #46

    “HA! SM gets killed off”

    No I didn’t.

  47. sangheli August 30, 2009 at 1:54 am -      #47

    NOOOOOOO we were all happy and hopping you got shot and you to spoil it with you’re being alive. DAMN YOU DAVID YOU DIDN’T MAKE YOUR BULLETS DEADLY ENOUGH.

  48. David August 30, 2009 at 5:24 am -      #48

    NOOOOOOO we were all happy and hopping you got shot and you to spoil it with you’re being alive. DAMN YOU DAVID YOU DIDN’T MAKE YOUR BULLETS DEADLY ENOUGH.

    For those who cannot read, It states that

    “An explosion and David is thrown to the floor”

    Means I got shot. Comprende?

  49. sangheli August 30, 2009 at 1:15 pm -      #49

    Why are there 2 davids?

  50. megafire August 30, 2009 at 1:44 pm -      #50

    I do believe there’s only one.

    Considering they have made the exact same amount of posts.

    I do wonder why the avatar changed in the later post, and not the older one.

  51. David August 31, 2009 at 12:52 am -      #51

    Ok I think something is wrong here.

    @ Admin

    Hey Man did you get part 3 yet? Im sure I sent it a few days ago

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